Essay
I believe that sports are an essential part
of school life for no losing the temperament and continue studying normally.
Since 11 years I have been in school,
practically all my life; so I have seen that school is always conformed by lots
of subjects that involucres Homework’s, essays, readings, expositions,
laboratory’s , quizzes, reports, evaluations, and other heavy things. So I
analyzed and asked myself, how can we support and not lose the temperament of
being pressured with all those things? I believe that we have an activity that
make us relax and help us to continue working and complete all the school
objectives; I named this activity as “Sports time”. Because when we have a
sport time, we can relax and disconnect of all those school things that make us
to lose the temperament.
Normally when I’m at the top of work
because of school assignments, I use to make important all the sports lessons
that the school can give us, because it help me to be calm and being distracted
of all the school themes; subjects like Physical education because I like to
run and play different sports and games to increase my physical state and also
having good relationships with my classmates. Other subject that have been
always the most important to me, is Club; because what a better way to being
relax and distracted of all the school assignments If is not playing your
favorite sport. In my case I like to much to play soccer, and it is better when
we played with all the formal soccer uniforms having the football shoes and
also playing with our teacher as a referee, it makes me feel like being in any
place that can’t be the school.
A important moment that I use to play
sports like soccer and volleyball, is the rest and the lunch time. Almost in
every lunch time, I like to play volleyball because I feel more energetic and
prepared for continuing studying and learning more of the school and the next
hours.
In addition I think that the key to pass
and succeed a quiz or an exam is to have previous time for playing a sport, because
most of the time we focus too much studying for quizzes and being worried about
how we will solve that quiz and the grade. So in those moments we should relax
for some time and play a sport with our friends to have some fun and not have mental
pressure before the Exam and solve it with a good attitude.
Finally I recommend all students that feel some pressure and anxiety
on the school for all the academic works and the concerns for passing the
school year, to have some physical activity to play your favorite sport and have
some fun with friends, all these activities make me in my case feeling more
relaxed and having predisposition for enter to school classes, work easier and
not being bored or sleepy inside them, so I will learn easier and pass all my
exams and quizzes.
Speaking partners report
September 1
Today with Maria paula, we talk about our godson. She told me about what her girl like and how is her personality, also a told her about my godson that is called Nataly. Later we talk about what profession do we like to our future; Maria paula told me that she would like to be doctor, so she want to study medicine in the Rosario university or in Javeriana. I told her that i would like to study architecture in Javeriana univerity.
September 16
On this day, Maria Paula and me talked about what food do we like. So I start explaining to her that i like too mucho to eat fast food, like hamburguers, pizzas, hot dogs and some others, but also a told her that my favorite food was spaguetti with meat balls. Then she told me that she doesn´t like sea fod, and also she love the mint limonade. then I also said her that i like more the cherry limonade
September 26
This day, Maria paula a me talked about what kind of movies do we like and also the genere. So I start telling she that i prefer the science fiction movies, because those movies make to feel very interested for what adventures and also the tecnological advances. On the other hand, Maria Paula told me that she has not go many times to the cinema, like once per month, so she told me that she prefer romantic movies. Then we started to talk about the musice that we liked, so I tell she that my family likes to much 70´s 80's and 90´s rock, so I like too and also actually I like some electronic music. Maria Paula said me that she like pop music, but also her family like Vallenato.
You did not include a title and did not use future perfect or continuous. Use capitals when you begin a paragraph and improve your punctuation. Do not use contractions in an essay.
ResponderEliminarGrade: 3.7
Diego: the date was not written properly (day-full month-year). There are spelling mistakes and you didn't use capitals in proper nouns ("WHIT" - Hilton). The pronoun I always goes in capitals, too. The farewell is YOURS sincerely.
ResponderEliminarI have the feeling you wrote your letter in a hurry and not paying full attention to what you were doing.
Grade: 3.5
Diego, do not use contractions in formal writings. Remember that the question was the title of your essay.
ResponderEliminarGrade: 4.2
Great!
ResponderEliminarThings to improve: 10
1 Abstract nouns
2 Future tenses
3 Vocabulary for emotions
4 Phrasal verbs
5 Vocabulary for opinions
6 Subject-verb agreement
7 Collocations
8 Spelling
9 Sentence order
10 Punctuation
Grade: 6